They attract
He doesn't know the fact;
fairies waiting beyond his back!
Will he come to the same skull track?
But her eyes,
Her beautiful face unites and ties
Her hands' touch victimized how many guys!
When she calls her friends, he will give weird sighs!
A Skull island waiting,
but neither his eyes nor his hand shaking!
His lantern is showing;
what is in her eyes glowing!
Not showing the hidden victim to be
or predicting the next sigh from the deep sea!
Will he come to the same skull track?
But her eyes,
Her beautiful face unites and ties
Her hands' touch victimized how many guys!
When she calls her friends, he will give weird sighs!
A Skull island waiting,
but neither his eyes nor his hand shaking!
His lantern is showing;
what is in her eyes glowing!
Not showing the hidden victim to be
or predicting the next sigh from the deep sea!
I wonder if her eyes are betraying her evil intentions
ردحذفInteresting piece
I like the vague ending
You need an 'are' here
his hand - are - shaking
I don't get the line about her face though :$
What do you mean unites and ties?
This is a personal note: I feel the poem would be a lot deeper and smoother without the rhyme. Like you don't have to use 'guys' or 'ties
Keep on writing and hope to see more if your work on Takhayyal
Do you think you can write a piece for it in Arabic? I'm interested in reading about mermaids in Arabic :)'